Conseil lettre de motivation pour stage à San-Francisco
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Conseil lettre de motivation pour stage à San-Francisco

lionceau
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15 Janvier 2013 à 00:32
Bonjour,

J'ai refais la lettre de motivation.
S'il vous plait , que vous pensez de ma lettre de motivation ?
Merci

My name and postal information
January 15 2013,
Facebook
Recruiter
Menlo Park, CA, 94025
OBJECT : 
To seek Internship in software development C++/Java in San Francisco from June to August 2013 Software Engineer. 


Dear Sir or Madam,


I am currently a student in my fourth year of a masters one in computer science at the French engineering school « 3iL »(City : xxx, country : France). Moreover in summer 2012 I received the Upper-intermediate level Certificate in English language from Berkeley.
I am passionate about new technology and I like creativity and innovation and this is the reason why I am writing to you to apply for a software engineering Internship.

I can define myself as someone who show initiative, who is rigorous, reliable, organized, adaptable, and I learn quickly and I like working by myself and equally I like working in a team.
As you can see from my résumé i am proficient with the C++ and Java, PHP and CSS. Moreover As you can see in my portfolio on my website, since 2009 I have made some websites and some softwares and video games.
I believe my qualifications and experience would match your requirements
I am strongly motivated to do a good job in an intern at facebook from june to august 2013.

Thank you for your time and consideration. 
I look forward to hearing from you.I am looking forward to hearing from you
Sincerely,
Fxxxx

Merci pour vos conseils et votre aide.
Cordialement, 
Florian
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Cheeky
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17 Janvier 2013 à 16:49
Alors d'abord, je n'ai jamais écrit de lettre de motiv en anglais donc je ne connait pas les formules appropriées. Je vais juste corriger l'ortho et la grammaire mais fait une petite recherche sur les formules toutes faites de LM !

To seek (I am looking for an... I am seeking an) Internship in software development C++/Java in San Francisco from June to August 2013 Software Engineer (qu'est ce que ça fait après la date ?).


Dear Sir or Madam, [Verifie comment saluer, ça sonne un peu faux pour moi]


I am currently preparing the first year of my master degree in computer science at the French engineering school « 3iL »(City : xxx, country : France). Last summer, I received the Upper-intermediate level Certificate in English language from Berkeley.
I am fond of new technology and I am very creative and innovative when I have to run projects. Thus, this is the reason I am writing to you, in order to apply for a software engineering Internship.

I define myself as someone who show initiative, who is rigorous, reliable, organized, adaptable, I am a fast learner and I like working by myself as much as I like working in a team.
As you can see from my resume , I am skilled with C++, Java, PHP and CSS. Moreover, as you can see in my website's portfolio, I have made some websites, some softwares and video games for 3 years.
I believe my qualifications and experience would match your requirements / expectations.
I am strongly motivated work with you as an intern at facebook from june to august 2013.

Thank you for your time and for your consideration.
I am looking forward to your answer.
Sincerely, 99,9% sur que ça se dit pas !
Fxxxx
lionceau
12 Messages



18 Janvier 2013 à 18:43
Bonjour ,

Merci pour tes conseils, je viens de faire les modifications, mais j'ai pas encore trouvé comment bien finir la lettre de motivation.

Dis moi s'il te plait ce que tu penses de cette lettre :


My name and postal information on this line


January 18 2013,
Facebook
Recruiter
Menlo Park, CA, 94025


Dear Hiring Manager,

Please consider this letter and my attached resume  to apply for a 2013 summer internship position in software development C++/Java PHP at San Francisco.I choice to do my internship in Facebook because Facebook makes lots of very good softwares and all the Facebook 's intern recommend to do an internship at Facebook to me. Thus,I am very motivated to work with the best social network, Facebook.

I am currently preparing the fourth year of a masters one in computer science at the French engineering school « 3iL » in Limoges , France. In the school I am also the representative student of the university for creating company and organization partnering . Outside the school i am treasurer of a blood donation organization. These positions have helped me become very organized to build some projects.
I am fond of new technology and I am very creative and innovative when i have to run projects. I can define myself as someone who show initiative, who is rigorous, reliable, organized and adaptable. I am also a fast learner who likes working by myself and equally with others on a team.
As you can see from my resume i am proficient with the C++ and Java, PHP and CSS. Moreover, as As you can see in my website's portfolio I have designed some websites and worked on some softwares and video games for 3 years.

I believe my qualifications and experience would match your requirements
I am strongly motivated to work for facebook for this summer.

Thank you for your time and consideration. 
I look forward to hear from you.

Best regards,,
Fxxxx
Cheeky
8 Messages



21 Janvier 2013 à 16:58
C'est une autre lettre, on est d'accord ? Parceque t'as pas beaucoup pris en compte ce que je t'ai dis la lol
lionceau
12 Messages



21 Janvier 2013 à 18:59
Bonjour,

Je suis partit de tes remarques , puis j'ai essayé d'améliorer la lettre pour mieux me vendre.

Que penses tu de cette lettre de motivation ?

Merci pour ton aide.
Cheeky
8 Messages



24 Janvier 2013 à 17:33
Dear (Dear ca fait vraiment "Chère" pour ta chérie ou autre...encore une fois, cherche les formules appropriées) Hiring Manager,

I'm applying to an internship position in software development C++/Java PHP at San Francisco for this summer 2013, please take note of this letter and my attached resume. I chose to apply in Facebook because it makes lots of interesting softwares and all of Facebook's former interns recommended me to do an internship in your society. Thus, I am very motivated to work with the best social network.

I am currently preparing a master degree in computer science at the French engineering school « 3iL » in Limoges. I am also the representative student of the university for creating company and organization partnering [j"ai pas bien capté, c'est des projets étudiants?] . I also run the treasury of a blood donation organization. These positions helped me to get organized when I get to run projects.
I am fond of new technologies and I am very creative and innovative when i have to run projects (même phrase que la précèdente). I can define (un peu maladroit) myself as someone who show initiative, who is rigorous, reliable, organized and adaptable. I am also a fast learner who likes working by myself as much as I like working on a team.
As you can see in my resume i am skilled with C++ and Java, PHP and CSS. Moreover, as you can see in my website's portfolio I have designed some websites and worked on some softwares and video games for 3 years.

I believe (wish? hope? believe ca veut dire que t'es sur qu'ils vont te prendre) my qualifications and experience would match your requirements
I am strongly motivated to work for facebook this summer.

Thank you for your time and consideration.
I look forward to hear from you.

Best regards,,
Fxxxx
 
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